I have previously reported that I had completed the final edit of The Dakota Connection, a Ryce Dalton novel, and has started on Prerogatives, a Pendergast Brothers novel. I am thrilled to report I am on page 125 of 230 pages and things are moving smoothly.
What am I looking for this time through? First, contractions in dialogue. No, I’m not trying to contract the dialogue. I’m trying to find the ‘I am’, ‘she did not’, or ‘he would’, which should be ‘I’m’, ‘she didn’t”, or ‘he’d’.
Why? Because one of my suggested books said most people talk in contractions. I’ve been careful to listen, and the book is correct. ‘I am going to the movies’ is always ‘I’m going to the movies’.
Second, I’m looking for clarity. This is actually the third rewrite of Prerogatives, and I’ve made numerous corrections, but there’re still a few spots the reader might not understand.
Third, I’d attempting to make the characters more easily loved, or more easily hated. Characters need character. Characters must not look like a cardboard cutout at the local old west town, where only the head changes. If a character has no character, there’s no reason to like them….or hate them. Or even want to know them.
My goal is twenty-five pages a day, which will allow me to complete this edit in just over four days. I haven’t decided where to go next. Perhaps I will take an hour off and just nap.
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